Eclipse Star: Exodus Chapter Seventy-Seven

March 20, 2012 at 1:18 am (Eclipse Star: Exodus) (, )

Eclipse Star: Chapter 77

“Recon”

 

Recap: Last time, Chris returned to the Northern Lodge utterly distraught, Derek and Syrus formed an alliance after discovering Derek’s father’s dead body, and Lindsey uncovered some secrets about Chris that she’s about to share with the group. The Legion is heading to the North, today, on Eclipse Star! Read the rest of this entry »

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Furious Angels Part 1 (Updated)

March 10, 2012 at 2:05 am (Furious Angels) (, )

Quite some time ago, I took the basic scripts from Furious Angels that I’d written back in college and gave them an update with more characters, more story, and a stronger emphasis on pushing things from a PG rating to a hard R. Since then, I’ve had some time to think about what needed to be changed and what I’d like to improve, so when I discovered that Remedy Entertainment was hiring for a writer and needed writing samples, I figured that Furious Angels seemed to fit in their wheelhouse, so I gave it an update.

What you see here is that update. Most of the changes are cosmetic with dialogue tuned a bit and the flow improved in spots. However, those who’ve read the first full version (version 2) will see a huge departure from the original concept. I was struggling with something major, and after I tried my little solution I suddenly became very excited. Let’s see if you can spot the change, and if it does indeed improve things. Enjoy the rewrite and please, more comments are very much welc0me. Read the rest of this entry »

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